September 08, 2012

No. 187

Walter Hill’s world was completely normal, until the day he discovered he could fly.
He could only get an inch off of the ground, but it was an inch more than everybody else.
Sheer force of will kept him in the air, as far as he could tell. He hadn’t magically sprouted wings or started flapping his arms like a hummingbird. He’d heard that bees were an aerodynamically impossible shape, and he wondered if they flew in the same manner.
Walt had great fun with his new power for about the first hour, zipping past his friends at speeds faster than a run without them realizing what he was doing. Randie Forsyth was not going to get her hat back.
His first obstacle was the pool. He hadn’t considered that an inch off of the ground meant exactly that, and did not apply to water.
As he pulled himself out, he began to think about ways to increase his altitude. He resolved, rightly or wrongly, to first go examine some bees.

2 comments:

Leah Schouten said...

Okay, so I have questions. Do you mean he wondered if bees flew in the same manner as hummingbirds? Or as him?? If you mean the latter, then I suggest moving that sentence down to the last paragraph.

Also, how did he get his new power? Maybe he had it his whole life and only just discovered it.

Lots of potential here and I think it's a fun story.

Ryan Dugaro said...

It's meant to be that he wonders if he's flying in the same manner as a bee. I agree, after re-reading, it's not very clear.
If the story continued it would be about him trying to find out how he was flying, and coming up with new ways to use the ability to hover no higher than an inch off of the ground.

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